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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Immoral Behavior in Public. You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:
1.我们经常在公共场合见到各种不道德的行为，叙述你的一次相关经历。
2.这些不文明行为会有哪些影响。
3.我们应该怎样改善这种现象。
●审题概述●?
这是一篇议论文，可以根据作文要求列出提纲：第一部分，列举不文明行为并叙述一次相关经历；第二部分，不文明行为的影响，一两个即可；第三部分，提出建议。
【范文】
Immoral Behavior in Public
To witness ○1immoral behavior in public, one need only visit the Beijing subway. I still remember the first time I took the Beijing subway. It was an early morning. I was in a hurry to go to school. When I was trying to get a ticket, I found a lot of people waiting in front of me, but nobody was in the line.
○1Immoral behaviors in public ○2initiate a series of problems. One of the most serious ones is that it may exert a negative impact on our ○3sense of social responsibility. We will keep ignoring other people’s rights and feelings, and in turn, we too will be disrespected some day.
The reform of○1 this phenomenon is certainly not easy. With an eye on practical ○2implementation and ○3cost effectiveness , I propose that society make it clear in every way that people who fail to respect the ④common good will be seriously punished. Stricter policies for this should be made to correct this phenomenon as soon as possible.
We all expect “A World without Thieves". Everyone ○1shares the huge responsibility of ○2demonstrating his or her justice at the proper time. Personal responsibility is vital to build a harmonious socialist society.
◇第一段思路点评：
作文要求第一点，相关经历
◇语言点提示：
○1 immoral behavior in public：直接点题
◇第二段思路点评：
不文明行为的影响
◇语言点提示：
○1 immoral behavior in public：重复名词词组，与第一段衔接
○2 initiate：意思是“产生，发动”
○3sense of social responsibility：意思是“社会责任感”
◇第三段思路点评：
如何改善这些现象
◇语言点提示：
○1 this phenomenon：指代前文“immoral behavior in public”，与上文衔接，且避免重复
○2implementation：意为“执行，实施”
○3cost effectiveness：意为“成本效率”
④ common good：意为“公益”
◇第四段思路点评：
总结
◇语言点提示：
○1share a huge responsibility: 意为“承担重大责任”
○2demonstrate：意为“展现”
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